劍橋雅思13小作文9分范文賞讀之test4 體育館對比
劍橋雅思13小作文9分范文賞讀之test4 體育館對比
The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
劍橋雅思小作文解析
關(guān)鍵在于把圖中變化較大和變化沒那么大的部分區(qū)分開。
變化小的部分：
這實際上也是 sports center 的核心部分，其中只有 gym 變成了大約2倍，其他部分沒有變化。
不會表達的信息：這塊區(qū)域，叫做 the sports centre building 或者 the main building
此外，這個區(qū)域的 changing room 和 seatings，共同叫做 swimming facilities
如果覺得文章字數(shù)過多，可以只寫 swimming facilities
容易忽視的信息
gym 沿著 sports center 的北邊，stretch along the north side，gym 擴張的方向是向東
2變化大的部分
按照編號的順序
1. 西側(cè)的 outdoor courts 變成了 lersure pool
2. 東側(cè)的 outdoor courts 變成了 sports hall 和 dance studios
3. 前門的區(qū)域(包含 reception)，新增了 sports shop 和 cafe
以下范文，不是按照傳統(tǒng)的“一幅圖分一組”的方式寫的，而是按照“變化大和變化小的區(qū)域各分一組”寫的。
劍橋雅思小作文范文：
The upper map shows the plan of a university sports centre as it is now and the lower map shows the same building once it has been redeveloped.
主體段1：變化的總體介紹
Overall, the existing 25-metre pool and surrounding facilities will remain largely unchanged. However, the building will be substantially expanded by means of the addition of a leisure pool and a range of other new facilities.
主體段2：中間區(qū)域
Currently, the sports centre building consists only of a 25m pool, related swimming facilities and a gym that stretches along the north side. While the planned new sports centre will occupy around twice the current floorspace, these facilities will remain unchanged except that the gym will be significantly extended to the east.
主體段3：周圍區(qū)域
Either side of the building at present, there are outdoor courts which will make way for a new leisure pool to the west of the main building, and a sports hall and two dance studios to the east. To the south of the 25m pool, the current reception area will be enlarged to accommodate a sports shop and café, on the west and east sides respectively. Finally, new changing rooms will be built in the south-west and south-east corners.
詞匯解釋
floor space
floor space, or floorspace is the area (measured as square feet or square metres) taken up by a building or part of it 占地面積
劍橋雅思13小作文9分范文賞讀之test2 租住房屋占
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
劍橋雅思小作文解析
我們都知道，動態(tài)柱狀圖可以看做線圖。
1) 租房家庭的比例總體下降，最后小幅上升
2) 住自購房的家庭的比例總體上升，最后小幅下降
似乎這是一個2條線的線圖，文章結(jié)構(gòu)：
A. 把信息分成2個主體段，分別寫租房和住自購房的家庭對應(yīng)的兩條線
B. 然后，在結(jié)尾段寫1971年以及之前和之后租房和自購房的比例大小關(guān)系
然而，這樣想就錯了。
不建議這樣寫，有2個原因
1圖形隱含了信息：租房家庭比例+住自購房的家庭比例=100%
數(shù)據(jù)是否需要全部寫?不用。既然加起來是100%，其實每一年寫租房(或者住自購房的)家庭的比例即可。那么，在你把租房家庭主體段寫完之后，住自購房的家庭主體段已經(jīng)不需要寫了
2雖然1971年之前的5年租房的比住自購房的多，但是差異一樣嗎?顯然不一樣，而這個差異大小的區(qū)別是必寫信息。
正確的分段方式
主體段1：1971年以及之前的共12個比例分成一大組(一個主體段)，要比較(租房比住自購房)多得特別多和多得沒那么多
主體段2：1971年之后的8個比例分成另一大組(另一個主體段)，其他同上
結(jié)尾段：寫租房的總趨勢和住自購房的總趨勢
推薦這種分段方式，是因為它能更好地展示圖形中的 comparisons, 其實也算是這個題目的標準寫法。
但是，并不是非要用標準的方式才能寫作文。
如果不這樣分段，這篇小作文能達到7分嗎?
能，只要你語言夠好。
劍橋雅思小作文范文
開頭段
The bar chart illustrates how the proportions of households that lived in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales changed from 1918 to 2011.
主體段1：1971年之前
Before 1971, more households lived in rented accommodation than in owned accommodation. The biggest gap was in 1918, when 77% households rented. The same proportions (68%) of households lived in owned accommodation in 1939 and 1953. In 1961, there were as many as 40% of households in owned accommodation. Finally, the year 1971 witnessed equal proportions of households that lived in both types of accommodation.
主體段2：1971年之后
On the other hand, there were more households that lived in owned accommodation than in rented accommodation after 1971. In 1991 and 2001, households in owned accommodation more than doubled those in rented accommodation. The difference was less prominent in 1981 and 2001, when about 60% of households lived in owned accommodation.
結(jié)尾段：租房和住自購房家庭的趨勢
It is clear that, while there was an increase in the percentage of households in owned accommodation in these two nations, fewer and fewer households rented.