【托福寫作備考】要對自己的托福作文進行自我審核
在托福備考過程中，寫作練習(xí)除了不斷看一下高分的范文外，始終還是要進行一些自己的動筆練習(xí)的。下面就為大家?guī)砣绾螌徍俗约旱耐懈懽骶毩?xí)，希望能為大家的備考帶來一些幫助。
【托福寫作備考】要對自己的托福作文進行自我審核
托福文章字?jǐn)?shù)
當(dāng)然，對于審核自己的托福文章的字?jǐn)?shù)，當(dāng)然不會是要求大家每次作文后一字一字的數(shù)有沒有達到標(biāo)準(zhǔn)要求。而是，在寫作時需要明一些問題，包括主題論點確定了么?考題有明確的分論點展開么?每個分論點中有明確的論述或是例證么?這些都是對托福作文最為基本的要求，如果這些要求都已經(jīng)達到，那字?jǐn)?shù)這個問題也自然就不用提了。
言語過于簡單
對于初入托福寫作的學(xué)生來說，除了文章的字?jǐn)?shù)問題之外，就是其中頻頻出現(xiàn)過于簡單的句型。對于一種語言考試來說，雖然不要求你使用高難度詞匯或語法，但是如果出現(xiàn)過多的簡單句，也會造成評分的下降。比如，在形容詞中用了過于抽象化的詞語，這些詞語不但不能非常到位的表述想要表達的內(nèi)容。同時，也會讓閱卷人產(chǎn)生誤解，你的詞匯基礎(chǔ)真的可以么?
模板痕跡太重
想要快速上手托福寫作，很多中國學(xué)生都會選擇使用模板的方式。但是，在使用的過程中，還是要提醒大家，邊練習(xí)邊收集好自己的素材和例證。太過于追求經(jīng)典范文中的內(nèi)容，對其進行背誦，其實對于自己寫作的得分并不會帶來什么幫助。
托福寫作解析：高分需要注意的三個問題
一.英語基本功
在托福獨立寫作中，并沒有相關(guān)的閱讀和聽力內(nèi)容可以幫助考生組織自己的語言，考生在答題的時候能憑借的僅僅是自己的英語基本功。在考試中，很多考生因為對于詞匯和語法不熟悉，所以不能恰當(dāng)?shù)氖褂迷~匯來表達自己的觀點，文章中的句子和句子之間邏輯的關(guān)系混亂。
建議：考生在備考托福寫作的過程中，首先要重視托福詞匯的備考，對于基礎(chǔ)比較薄弱的考生來說，要從四級詞匯開始背起，然后逐步過渡到六級詞匯和托福詞匯的備考。建議考生在備考詞匯的時候要制定一些背詞匯的計劃表，有步驟的去背誦。其次，考生要重視語法的積累，要重點掌握被動語態(tài)，強調(diào)句型，非謂語動詞，從句的使用方法。
二.中式翻譯
英語畢竟不是我們的母語，很多考生在學(xué)習(xí)英語的時候習(xí)慣性的用中式思維來表達自己的觀點，比如很多考生用black society來表達黑社會的含義，用eight hang來表達八卦的意思。但是判卷的考官并不是中國人，考官并不明白考生真正想要表達的意思是什么，考生在托福寫作考試中，很容易因為這樣而出現(xiàn)低分的現(xiàn)象。
建議：針對有這種情況的考生，小編認(rèn)為，如果想要改變這種現(xiàn)狀，就一定要多聽多看。建議考生通過一些經(jīng)典的美劇比如《生活大爆炸》，《老友記》，或者是一些經(jīng)典的美國大片比如《阿凡達》，《風(fēng)月俏佳人》等等來增強對于英語中語境的熟悉程度，提升語感。
三.套路化明顯
很多考生在寫托福寫作的時候會背誦模板，在考試的時候，不管遇到了什么題目都生搬硬套的使用模板，這樣在考官判卷的時候，很多作文框架千篇一律，如出一轍，極大的降低了考生的分?jǐn)?shù)。
建議：建議考生在備考托福閱讀的時候，每天進行英文寫作練習(xí)，用英文來寫日記，在寫作的過程中增強自己的寫作能力。
托福寫作解析：電影和電視的利弊
托福寫作題目：
A/D Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
30分作文也沒有那么難做到啦。這是一篇近期考出30分寫作的同學(xué)的考前習(xí)作。這個考試季很多同學(xué)反映寫作壓分，30分的作文單項分已經(jīng)很罕見。我們一起看看，在這個季節(jié)，什么樣的作文能穩(wěn)穩(wěn)拿下考場高分。
總結(jié)一下幾個要點
1. 清晰有力的論證邏輯
2. 準(zhǔn)確的用詞
3. 句式的適當(dāng)變化，如排比，虛擬，短句的偶爾出現(xiàn)。
4. 小錯誤多次出現(xiàn)可以容忍
托福寫作滿分作文：
Whenever I turn on TV, I see dark themes and plots of programs broadcast on it. Just calculate roughly, there are about 30 programs whose theme is pessimistic in every 40 programs. 【眼尖的同學(xué)一眼能看出來幾處語法錯誤，顯然ETS不那么介意;我們要學(xué)習(xí)的是作者用數(shù)字說明問題】And there are so many plots orienting adults that should not be seen by young people.【上面兩個句子點出電視節(jié)目的兩個問題，為論點的出現(xiàn)做充足鋪墊】So I strongly believe that movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. 【出論點，論點句要穩(wěn)扎穩(wěn)打，千萬別此刻玩花的，花大了別人沒看懂就麻煩了】This is not only because young people will imitate the inappropriate behavior in the programs, but also because the dark theme of them will distort the way young people view the world.【預(yù)告自己的兩個分論點，老套的開頭結(jié)構(gòu)，勝在穩(wěn)重清晰】
Firstly, young people may imitate the bad behavior they saw on televisions and movies.【同樣，觀點句不許玩花的，老實點兒】 Young people, especially children, are not sophisticated enough to think about the consequences【用詞準(zhǔn)確】 or their behavior carefully, and they are often eager to try new things 【解釋論點句為什么成立--因為年輕人有這些特性】. Television programs and movies often include some violent behavior in them in order to make the plots more inviting【用詞準(zhǔn)確】 and attract more people to watch.【重申電視節(jié)目的特點，暴力鏡頭多，與上一句‘年輕人愛模仿’的信息合起來為下一句短句的力量制造必要條件】 So here is the problem【我們一再強調(diào)的短句的力量】. Young people will probably try those inappropriate【用詞準(zhǔn)確】 behaviors they saw on televisions, thinking they are normal or acceptable.【換個方式把論點句重新說了一遍，但并不讓人覺得重復(fù)，因為順承上文的邏輯推理而成立。全段沒有一個例子，直接用純論證完成，功力可見】
Secondly, lots of pessimistic themes of television programs or movies will make young people feel sad about the world. 【雖然主語長了一些，但作為論點句，依然是經(jīng)典的主謂賓結(jié)構(gòu)，簡潔明了】As mentioned in the former paragraph, there are violence in TV programs and movies, and young people may not only imitate those bad behaviors, but also affected by the sad view in these programs.【借力上一段的內(nèi)容，回點上段，增加文章內(nèi)部的粘結(jié)力，但是在上一段所討論信息的基礎(chǔ)上向前推進一步，推出新論點，經(jīng)典的承上啟下結(jié)構(gòu)】 Because they are during a period when their ways of looking at the world are formed, seeing too much about the dark side of the society is no good for their growth.【解釋上一句為什么成立--因為年輕人世界觀正在成形,應(yīng)該用being formed 而不是are formed，但這種小錯誤不影響高分】It can create a false sense of reality【用詞準(zhǔn)確，來自平時的積累】, as if the only newsworthy events are those that are tragic or violent. They may form a bad habit of always looking at people or events from a dark point of view, feeling hopeless and despairing, even conducting some self-destructive behaviors.【這個列舉的句子如果從sat語法的角度來說也是錯誤多多的……不過從語義上來說，做了一個因勢利導(dǎo)夸大其詞的論證推斷，三個列舉層層遞進互為因果，還是實現(xiàn)了列舉的修辭效果的】
Admittedly, there are some programs trying to convey optimistic view to viewers, but their plots are so unrealistic that they cannot convince young people. 【讓步段第一句話，先提出自己之前的論證沒有正視的情況，再明確指出這種情況的致命缺點】And they tell stories in a too exaggerating way, making stories more unconvincing. 【補刀】For example【全文都沒有舉例論證，到這里實在摒不住了，呵呵】, once I saw a TV program on the daily life of a couple. In order to convey【用詞準(zhǔn)確】 the view that ‘if you do good things, you will always get want you want’, the program told a story that the young man picks up 10000 dollars three times a week just because he always helps his neighbors and the god is touched by him! What a ridiculous story! If I were a child, I would have no desire to do good things, as I didn’t believe I would pick up so much money no matter how many good things I did.【這個虛擬語氣的使用信手拈來，適合各種假設(shè)狀況的探討】 So even if there are some programs with optimistic themes, I don’t think they will impact young people more than those with pessimistic themes. 【總結(jié)這個例子對于自己論點的意義，再次強化自己的立場】
托福寫作模板:演藝明星的高薪
托福寫作真題題目：
Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
托福寫作范文：
Nowadays, the annual incomes of many sports stars and film stars come to millions of dollars. Some people claim that their salaries are too high. Yet, in my opinion, such salaries are well deserved. They work hard to become famous, provide entertainment for us, and win honors for their countries.
First, famous athletes and entertainers make painstaking efforts to achieve fame. Fame is a wonderful thing to have, but it seldom appears overnight. Famous people have worked hard for years to achieve their fame today and they have to continue their good work to maintain it. For their hard work, sports and entertaining stars deserve to be generously rewarded. Unfortunately, people tend to focus on the huge amounts of money made by them. They rarely appreciate the efforts that athletes and entertainers have to make in order to achieve the fame that they have today. For example, in order to win the first place in a 100-meter dash, an athlete has to cover hundreds of miles during training. Famous stars deserve their high salaries because they have worked hard.
Second, sports and entertaining stars provide us with good entertainment. On weekends, many of us attend a football match that includes Beckham, see a movie that stars Julia Roberts, or go to a concert that features Celine Dion. These people help us make good use of our free time by entertaining us. As a result, we feel inspired as well as relaxed. In other words, we feel energetic again after attending the events. We even feel that we have more to enjoy in life and have new aspirations. For such reasons, these people are worth their high salaries.
Third, athletes and entertainers win honors for their countries. For example, after four years’ hard work, many athletes win gold medals at the Olympics Games. They are able to make millions of dollars a year after the games. Such high salaries are justified, because these athletes have won honors for their countries in the most competitive arena and have made their people proud, something few people can even dream of. This is true for entertainers as well. Many actors and actresses receive high salaries after they have won Oscars or prizes at Cannes Films Festival. Those people also deserve high salaries, because they have made a name in films for their country and have made their country better known by people elsewhere in the world.
All in all, famous athletes and entertainers merit their high salaries, for their hard work, entertainment they provide, and their contribution to their country. If I had a chance, I would be a famous star who can make millions of dollars a year.
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